Is it normal to write poems such as this?

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She’d been my only girl
And my first love’s whirl
But she had said goodbye
And she had made me cry

On the street yesterday
She was walking my way
And as she saw me there
Her nose went in the air

But suddenly I’d seen
That she’s no beauty queen
She’s got that pointed chin
Her legs are short and thin

Her chest is rather flat
The rest of her quite fat
And part of me was sad
But most of me was glad

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  • Terence_the_viking
    10 years ago

    Haha a girl made you cry
    did she punch you in the Eye?

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  • WhiteCrow
    10 years ago

    Hey me and you can do buisness. I am quite a good singer by many people beside my self. As I read this I sang it out loud. You write the songs I sing 60 40 pay I get 40 you get 60. Deal?

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  • KaffeInjection
    10 years ago

    Noooo.. That's LIKE SOOOOOOOO SOO SOO MUCH not normal at all.. I mean, you gotta be like the first person ever in the whole world with a population of ALOOOOT of people that writes poems like that..

    That is sooooo much nooooot Normal at allllllll!

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  • peterr
    10 years ago

    That is the worst douchebag poetry I have ever heard. OMFG

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  • SplinterWingz
    10 years ago

    ...Dont give up your day job but keep practicing the poems, get rid of that annoying repeated tune with the words and in a few years you'll be on your way to lyrical genius.

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  • KRFTW
    10 years ago

    Your hurting inside.

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  • NotStrangeBird
    10 years ago

    Was she wearing a clown suit?

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  • Faceless
    10 years ago

    I cant stand modern rhyming poetry unless its through lyrical conscious rap. Only way you can get away with simplistic rhyming couplets is if youre a wack ass rapper or if its the 18th century and your last names Wordsworth.

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  • handsignals
    10 years ago

    That's called sour grapes.

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  • bristexai
    10 years ago

    I don't get it.

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  • LeatherbackSeaTurtleIsABadass
    10 years ago

    That's a sad but beautiful poem. You are a very good writer

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