Is my poem good?

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''today was the greatest day of my life,the fucking shit i had been doing this time was a cluster of ass whiping my testicles into the sack with no merit other than bashing the wall unto the head of the court where i was fighting my drains up the mirror of truth, a satanic priest was looking to my eyes as i turned into a sphere of un-magical designing to understand the flaws of my only way to turn into the real self i had been watching from a cloud as i stroke the sound to my head and failed to contemplate the wind of a passage narrower than your average clock and the time well it was time to fear for what had been not seen and what had been unseen unto the passage of this road''

be serious

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  • Olddelusionalsailor
    7 years ago | pl

    Atrocious.

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  • RoseIsabella
    7 years ago

    Doesn't flow like a poem at all.

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  • Mario214
    7 years ago

    Practice. Read more poems from good poets write more.
    I am sure someday I will buy your poetry book.
    Wish you the best.

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  • ZaneT
    7 years ago

    That is just a bunch of vulgar thoughts and words! That is not what most, if any would call a poem. What is your purpose here? What are you trying to say? Who is your audience? Think of something to share with your reader as opposed to just relying on the profane or shock value. Read different forms of poetry as a guide or inspiration on how to best present a finished piece. Develop your poems over time. Write down thoughts, then edit. Learn the rules before you break them. Good luck!

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  • HalfInsaneFemale
    7 years ago

    Fuckin shit

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  • Ellenna
    7 years ago

    I found it sort of interesting after the opening section but I wouldn't call it a poem.

    If you tried setting it out differently rather than in a wall of words I might change my mind: poetry isn't set out in the way you've written this

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